Comment #15616

Forum: Short stories
Emy
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Eh, thanks...

But I gave it to my mom and she says that it's "boring" and "heavy reading" that "only people with very high IQs can read"..... It's not really, is it?! Because that would be completely missing the point of why I changed my writing style to be like this...
Ribbit
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Ribbit 27 Germany MelancholicCholeric ISTJ 1127C
Well, it's hard to say. It probably isn't too appealing to everybody, or the 'general audience' or something. You have to be an avid reader somehow to like the story. To really appreciate the humor in it, a certain amount of understanding of generic fantasy stories or fairy tales is needed, I think.

I really liked the story and found it light hearted and pleasing; It made me smile several times and was a good read; But I could easily imagine that a lot of people wouldn't really know what to do with it. Just like school children who don't know what to do with the books they have to read, if that comparison is not too far-fetched.
Emy
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Hm... Well, that's not good... Do you have any ideas about what I can do to fix that? I really do think that this seems to be a more natural writing style for me, oddly enough, but if it's too hard to read, then maybe I should just go back to trying to hammer out that other style.
Ribbit
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Ribbit 27 Germany MelancholicCholeric ISTJ 1127C
It's not really hard to read, it just needs the right audience. Your mom for example, well I don't know her of course, but probably she likes to read other stuff than you. So it's understandable that she doesn't quite know what to do with the story. But I, and a lot of other people probably, like that kind of style. Maybe try to show it other people of whom you know they read much and ideally a lot of different stuff.

I don't think that it's good when you try to force a writing style on you that does not come naturally to you. I guess you have to know if you deem it possible for you; I for example liked your last stories alot too, if that was a different style for you even, but it seems different to me. It depends on which target group you would like to have, but as I said just your mom and some people on the internet are maybe not sufficient enough to judge.

Sorry that my only idea basically is to ask other people and then decide for yourself. But I know literature only from the viewpoint of a reader.
LSCohen
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LSCohen 24 Israel MelancholicSanguine ISFJ 291 210C
Eh... Not much.

It is made for smart people. and when succeeding to understand, it worth the shot! Though your mom is right, Lower a bit the level of the writing style. SOMETIMES high grade writing is boring and heavy reading.